The Light in this scene has a story to tell! I think the only reason its not playing well is because the shot is stagnant.
Everything can't be day light, everything cannot be bright. Sometimes when you dream you have nightmares. And sometimes when you wake up, its still dark out.
I like dawn and twilight the best, those are the only times of day when theres a real feeling something might be different. Once in a while there is a storm to break things up, but they never last.