Sure, that's okay. I think tastes differ, and monitors differ (it's much lighter on my working monitor than on my older internet monitor), but your version looks okay to me too. But the first image is a bit too dark IMO, I'd like to be able to see more definition in the shadows.
There is some translucency, but not too much (0.2 I believe) as I think needles are rather thick and don't let much light through. But I may have to cheat a bit there too.