Massive improvement there, looking good Simon!
Other things I would recommend, would be things like, experimenting with the camera and composition, framing and focal length.
You'd be surprised how much more drama, grandeur and depth you can extract by utilising these.
I'd also go for a wider aspect on a shot like this, if the scene supports it of course.
Sorry if thats a bit vague. The shot is really progressing well.
Chris